增強(qiáng)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作中語(yǔ)句表現(xiàn)力的有效方法

　　縱觀多年來(lái)國(guó)家四、六級(jí)英語(yǔ)作文考試，考生作文成績(jī)欠佳的主要原因除了準(zhǔn)確性和連貫性差之外，語(yǔ)句軟弱無(wú)力也是不容忽略的一個(gè)方面。因此在英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作教學(xué)中，如何增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)句表現(xiàn)力的問(wèn)題必須引起我們足夠的重視，以提高學(xué)生寫(xiě)作的表達(dá)質(zhì)量。為此，筆者結(jié)合自己的寫(xiě)作教學(xué)實(shí)踐，針對(duì)該項(xiàng)技能的訓(xùn)練提出了一些切實(shí)可行的有效做法，供廣大同仁和英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)者參考借鑒。

　　一、避免使用語(yǔ)意弱的“be”動(dòng)詞。

　　1、把句中的表語(yǔ)轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語(yǔ)。例如：

　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab。

　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (轉(zhuǎn)換為前置定語(yǔ))

　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (轉(zhuǎn)換為并列結(jié)構(gòu)作后置定語(yǔ))

　　2、將作表語(yǔ)用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞。例如：

　　1) Weak: The team members are good players。

　　Revision: The team members play well。

　　2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness。

　　Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness。

　　3、在以“here”或“there”開(kāi)頭的句子中，把“be”動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫(xiě)句的主語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion。

　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists。

　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered。

　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived。

　　二、多用語(yǔ)意具體的動(dòng)詞，保持句意簡(jiǎn)潔明了。

　　例如：1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk。

　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk。

　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper。

　　Better: She compares prices and quality。

　　三、盡量運(yùn)用主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。

　　例如：1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity。

　　Better: Charity has supported the organization。

　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate。

　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate。

　　四、防止使用語(yǔ)意冗長(zhǎng)累贅的詞語(yǔ)。

　　例如：1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk。

　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk。

　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations。

　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation。

　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores。

　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores。

　　五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語(yǔ)或難懂的專業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ)。

　　例如：1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form。

　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals。

　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall。

　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall。